I changed my story in parts as i feel i over complicated the arrival of the new stripper. She needs to be seen as an immediate threat so i took out the idea about the old stripper helping the new stripper. Also changed the surgery part to her performing it on herself.

Storyline

An ageing stripper is happy and content with her job as the only dancer in the club she works in

Young hot stripper starts working at club

Feels she is being replaced by younger model

The battle to be top dog starts

Tries to improve body to compete with younger girl

Performs surgery on herself to ‘improve’ body.

Now looks inhuman and grotesque

Rejected by audience.